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Okay everyone, welcome, and I hope that you all enjoy chapter 5! This one reveals some things, so please don’t miss it!




Me and StarFire continued to walk side by side through the hallway, but said nothing. I couldn't stand it, and eventually broke the silence. “how are we here? I mean, I can't believe—“ He cut me off. “Sorry snap, but I can't explain now, you've just got to trust me.” “Trust you, what do you mean?” I stared ahead, a confused look on my Minifig Face.

“Here”, he said suddenly, pointing to one of the doors in the hallway. “You can stay in this room for now. Don't come out until I return.” I started to protest, “But can't you stay and talk awhile? I mean, this isn't the comment section dude!”

He glanced around, it almost looked as if he were nervous. “I wish that I could, but I really have to go now, remember what I said” And with that, he ran down the hall and out of sight. “Wait, I shouted after him, could you please just tell me where we are?” I sighed and opened the door to the room he had given me.

Once inside, I looked around the place, it was nothing to sneeze at, but not the nicest hotel room I'd ever been in. The main room was about the size of a master bedroom, and was furnished with a couch, coffee table, and a television. There was also a small bed and nightstand with a lamp in a separate room. I glanced down again at my new Minifig Body and whistled approvingly.

I still couldn't believe this was happening. Where was I? After searching the room a bit more, I sat down to watch some TV. I flipped through the channels (nothing good). An hour passed, and StarFire still hadn’t returned. Two, then three hours passed. I was getting restless. Then all of a sudden, I heard a knock at the door. “Well, it's about time”, I said as I flung open the door.

But to my surprise, it wasn't StarFire who stood there. It was TheClipper as his sig-fig! He wore jeans, a long-sleeved white shirt, and a red sweat coat. “Dude, thank goodness I found you”, he burst out in relief. He quickly stepped in, and as he did, quite clumsily slipped and fell to the floor in a heap.

I couldn't help myself and burst out laughing. He staggered back up, obviously embarrassed. “Cut it out,” he snapped back in a playful sort of way. We then began to finally converse with each other. TheClipper began. “Bro, you sound just like you do in the comment section!” “Thanks, I think.”

TheClipper glanced around. “This is truly incredible and all, but there is so much that I need to tell you. You are probably very confused.” I smirked, he was correct. “But first, may I know your real name”, I asked him. “Alex”, he replied, “Alexander Henderson”. He reached out his hand, “and yours?” “Dustin Smith.”

“Well, Dustin Smith” he began, “you got a minute or two?” I chuckled, “definitely.” We both sat down on the couch in the small room, and he began to explain our situation. “Someone hacked into all BrickWorks Users’ computers, phones, tablets, etc, causing the devices to put out a series of images and signals which made everyone's’ minds tell them that they are here. The people that did this can control what we hear, see, feel, and believe.” A shocked look appeared on my face, “How, why?” He continued, “no one really knows how, but we do know who. Raymond Damien, also known as the BrickWorks User, StarFire.




So, that’s chapter 5! Feel free to let me know what you think (please be honest). And also please correct me on any mistakes. Thanks a million for reading, and I hope that you can make it back to this page next week for chapter 6!
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LegoWilderness
4 weeks ago
Man, this is totally awesome! Oh, LegoWilderness will? Bold of you to assume I would correct any mistakes. Well, just for that, I'm going to keep my mouth shut, no matter how hard it may become!

*takes a roll of duct tape and rips off a noticeable stickier piece*

There, I'm silent!

*wraps it around head*
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago
Thank you!


*Checks personal message section*

Guess the "Duck Tape" fell off.
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago
As I said, I appreciate stuff like that, very helpful!
Guitarman2
4 weeks ago
I don't know if all the paragraph breaks is my favorite writing style though
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago
What, the spaces?

Yeah, I just did that so you could read it without losing your place or being overwhelmed.

Still learning, I’ve never done this before . . .
KnightofElabor
4 weeks ago
Nice! It's very witty and fast pace but there are also lots of details. Overall, it's well balanced and i can't wait for Ch.2!!!
(also, i personally liked the separated paragraphs cuz it made it easier for me to read. But that's just my opinion)
Operator011
4 weeks ago
Hey, Snapper! It reads well, is interesting, and is well paced. One of the best chapters I've read so far! You definitely need to work on you "Proper-sarcastic-cynic" phrasing a little though. I guess I'm just picky because that's kinda my thing. xD
I think the paragraph breaks are a little too frequent, but it doesn't detract from the actual story (IMO). Overall, great job! I'll go proof read it for any errors real quick...
Operator011
4 weeks ago
Okay, grammar/punctuation roasting time:

In the sentence "I quickly set my bike in the garage and walked inside the kitchen, my mom was making some of her 'famous' homemade pizzas (those are the bomb, as some person who says that kind of stuff would say)." the comma in the middle is out of place. It should either be a period, or a semi-colon.

“just wondering how your part of our build is going” There should be a period there. Also, when you say "I reply." it looks like you wrote the previous sentence. It should be "I reply," with a comma.

". . . and by the way, there's a conversation going on in the forum, if you'd like to join, BlackPixel and StarFire are there.” You need to either get rid of the first comma, or turn the second comma into a period.

Note: Whenever you are adressing someone, as in "Hello, Snap!" you should put a comma in between the greeting (or whatever it is) and the name. E.g. "You can come onto the forum if you'd like, Operator."

You said "She was joking of course 'I agree with him though, both . . .'"
You should have a period in between the words and quote, if you word it this way.

Okay, I think that's all! Oh, one more thing. I don't think that you need to put quotes around every user's name, unless you're mentioning them for the first time. Great job!
LegoWilderness
4 weeks ago
Op, I said exactly that in the PM


Also, be sure to tell me if there are any mistakes, or grammar errors in my writing, since I don't want to look like the condescending rude guy who needs to work on his own stuff first


Operator, you should look into writing grammar books... you've done your homework!
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago
@Everyone:
Just so ya know, I wrote all this out as a draft in the program "pages". Because it’s a draft it’s definitely going to have spelling/grammar issues and I hope to correct those in the future. It’s also why there is all that spacing. If they weren’t there, it would be a very difficult and overwhelming thing to read. Now, this doesn’t mean that I want you guys to stop giving me advice (I love that), I'm just clarifying those two things!


@KnightofElabor:
Thanks so much, buddy!

@Operator011:
Thanks for the advice, much appreciated! (See message to @everyone above.)

@MrBrick:
Thanks, man! *Fist Bump*

@LegoWilderness:
IKR!
Operator011
4 weeks ago
LW:
No, you're stuff has the occasional misspelling, but other than that it's fine. No, I've just read a lot of books. xD

Snap: Okay, cool. I wasn't trying to roast you, just offering some constructive criticism. :thumbs_up:
Operator011
4 weeks ago
Wait, no. Wait. It's THIS: ": +1 :"?!?!?! Oh my precious. Anyways,
Dragon_Rider06
4 weeks ago
Wow great writing! Y'know I read somewhere that everyone is a writer if only they'll take the time to try. Looks like that's true!

"(please don’t waste your time wondering why)" Ok I am definitely wasting time wondering why. Y' can't just say something like that and not expect my curiosity not to start giving me grief.
Dragon_Rider06
4 weeks ago
Also I think the frequent paragraph breaks make it easier to read personally, I don't really like one huge lump of text.
LegoWilderness
4 weeks ago
Like Bob Ross said, "Talent is a pursued interest. Anything that you're willing to practice, you can do."

Keep it up, this is already something pretty fantastic, and it'll get even better!
SnapStudio
4 weeks ago
@LegoWilderness
Thanks again, man.

@Dragon_Rider06
Glad that you like it (so far).
Greenflame24
4 weeks ago
Time to correct some grammar! Jk
If I tried to correct anything O011 would be all over me telling me how my corrections need to be corrected
No, but literally. Great chapter, looking forward to reading more!

#MecabricksHasBecomeAnOfficalWritersWebSite
SnapStudio
3 weeks ago
Just a little bit longer.

Chapter 2 is almost here!
Operator011
3 weeks ago
Oh, I see! They're the same post. Good idea!
LegoWilderness
3 weeks ago
Man, I literally thought I had went bonkers when I saw one of my older comments on this "new" model

Three fries short of a Happy Meal, you could say.

Much, much better! I love this next chapter - it almost feels like an Adventures in Odyssey episode
LegoWilderness
3 weeks ago
For my corrections, and critiques

Here we go - you might want to look into some punctuation and quotation booklets, because when your characters speak, it is a little hard to know when the sentence stops and starts. That's all I have to say, since this was quite fabulous!
KnightofElabor
3 weeks ago
Nice!!!
(I have a feeling this post is gonna have LOTS of comments
)
CarTuner
3 weeks ago
Noob Question!: How do I get one model into another?
SnapStudio
3 weeks ago
@Operator-May-I-Help-You-011
Thanks a million!

@MrBrick
Thanks, dude!

@LegoWilderness
AIO? Never thought of it that way.
Thanks for the advice, and encouragement! To be honest though, I’ve never actually written and typed out a book before, definitely still learning here!

@KnightofElabor
Why thank you, sir!
Greenflame24
3 weeks ago
Great chapter Snap! The only things I noticed were, "Well, I'm still alive, and your device seems to be working perfectly." I think you might have meant, "Well, you're still alive..."

Also... I don't think that the top of a laptop is call the "lid". I know, it's kinda one of those puzzling things... anyways, it is actually called the display... I think


Anyways, great story... look'n forward to reading more!
SnapStudio
3 weeks ago
Thank you!

I actually did mean for him to say that, but now that I think about it more, it does sound kind of weird.

O_o
Greenflame24
2 weeks ago
No! SNAP! YOU ARE DEAD! YOUR HEAD IS COMPLETELY SEVERED FROM YOUR NECK!

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Greenflame24
2 weeks ago
Anyways... as always... great chapter!
SnapStudio
2 weeks ago


Thanks, buddy!

Glad to see you’re paying attention!
MrBrick
2 weeks ago
@Greenei I noticed that as well...

A moment of silence as we remember SnapStudio’s neck. Rest in Peace

Operator011
2 weeks ago
Great chapter! I just caught one thing: you spelled "recent" as "resent." Other than that, this was awesome!
LegoWilderness
2 weeks ago
You would be a very overweight human, changing into a Lego minifig like that on us! The equivalent of a Lego figure's bodyweight to a human's is 300 lbs.


Well, you did a phenomenal job!

Keep it up!!
SnapStudio
2 weeks ago
Thanks, guys!

In case y'all are wondering, my name isn’t Dusten Smith.


Just using my username for this story.
LegoWilderness
1 week ago
So, fantastic chapter, it's getting even better as you go on! Much better writing than last time (not that it wasn't awesome for the third chapter)!

Did the gunmen look mad because they had "angry clone" faces? Is this StarFire an alternate dimension version of Hammy?? Also, is this my apartment?!?
I have a thousand questions myself.
Operator011
1 week ago
Great chapter, Snap! A little bit of action! I personally would've thought about it for a bit, considered my chances, and then I'd've gone with the "rescuers." xD Then again, that's probably why I got sorted into Ravenclaw and not Gryffindor. Reason being I would go with them is I have nowhere else to go, and I wouldn't know what I was running into or from. xD

aNyWAys, great chapter! I really enjoyed reading it. There were a couple parts where I had to re-read some of the dialogue to make sense of it, but they were few. Good job!
SnapStudio
1 week ago
Thanks a million, y'all!

Now that you mention it, I kind of wish I'd included some of you guys in this thing.

But you never know, some of you just might appear . . .
Operator011
1 week ago
Wait, what did I just say? "Reason being I would go with them is . . . " WHAT THE (to quote GRRR-eenie boi) TOENAIL?! XD
It should've been "Reason I would go with them being . . . " xD
KnightofElabor
4 days ago
Nice! These just keep getting better! (sorry i'm late)
SnapStudio
2 days ago
Thanks, dude!


And chapter 5 is now up, everyone!
Operator011
2 days ago
Snap: WOW, good plot twist. Interesting . . . .

Also, I think you should maybe just delete the model, and post a new chapter. The comment section is getting a bit clogged up . . . .
LegoWilderness
1 day ago
Oh my


I was starting to like StarFire... but I have my own theories

Very well written! Nice job bro!
MrBrick
1 day ago
Epic plot twist.
SnapStudio
1 day ago
@Everyone
Thanks for reading, and for 6K views!


@Operator
Well, ummm. This thing probably isn’t going to be one of those 18 chapter Mecabricks Novels. I'm hoping to wrap it up by Chapter 9, maybe start something new. BTW, what happened to "The LightBringers."
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